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雅思写作考官考官范文分析学习
发布日期 :2018.06.25    浏览次数:1002 次

很多学生一旦谈及看范文,就茫然不知所措的问老师,看什么范文?怎么看?大部分学生很可能就只是匆匆忙忙的浏览了一遍范文。然后继续使用自己万年5分的思维逻辑,搭配5分的词组和句式表达,来潇洒的完成了一篇大作文。今天就带着大家一起来学习怎么通过看考官范文学习到真正的写作精华。以下选取的是一篇前雅思官方著名考官Simon的范文。


题目:Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


开头段:In the modern workplace, dress code are changing as employers focus more on results than on the rules that employees must follow. While I agree that the way people dress should be seen as irrelevant in many work contexts, I believe that dress codes still exist for good reason in certain profession.
替换学习:
the way their employees dress = dress codes
what matters = focus more on
workplace = work context
将原题中的词组表达进行替换是写开头段的一种方法。
主体段一:思路
立场:许多雇主不再告诉员工如何着装,我认为这是一种积极的趋势。
举例:世界上一些最成功的公司,包括像谷歌和Facebook这样的科技巨头,都因他们试图创造的轻松办公环境而闻名。
具体化:公司鼓励员工穿得随性,设置连公司高管和领导也很少穿T恤和牛仔裤以外的服饰。
结果:尽管高管和程序员可以自由地穿着他们喜欢的服装,他们同时也被期待能产出高品质的工作成果。
总结:从这类公司的表现和在全球的主导地位来看,严格的着装规范在科行业是完全不必要的。


大家可以看着思路+词组自己尝试说一遍:
科技巨头:technology giants
轻松的办公环境:the relaxed office environments
轻松着装:dress casually
公司高管:company executives
穿衣自由:are free to dress how they like
杰出的工作成果:work of outstanding quality
严格的着装规范:strict dress codes
科技行业:technology sector


以下为范文,大家可以关注词组和句子的连接:
On the one hand, many employers have stopped telling their staff how to dress, and I see this as a positive trend. Some of the most successful companies in the world, including technology giants like Google and Facebook, are famous for the relaxed office environments that they try to create. Employees are encouraged to dress casually, and even the company executives and leaders are rarely seen wearing anything other than T-shirts and jeans. However, while managers and programmers are free to dress how they like, they are expected to produce work of outstanding quality. It is clear from the performance and global dominance of such companies that strict dress codes are completely unnecessary in the technology sector.


大家以后可以参考这样的方式来“看”考官范文,一定要学习里面地道的词组表达,思路,以及句子和句子之间的连接,这样再进行模仿“抄写”,写作水平才能慢慢获得提升。
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